Monday, December 15, 2008

Monday Poem

the beauty
of a human asleep
is his defenselessness.
I could prey on you with a weapon,
a kiss


The beauty
of a human asleep
is the uniqueness
of her dream. Lonelier are our dreams
than death

21 comments:

Linda Jacobs said...

This is amazingly beautiful! That last line...oooh!

Annamari said...

Linda,

thank you.

gingatao.com said...

It is a beautifully made poem, delicate and strong.

lissa said...

just lovely, I like the part about the kiss

Annamari said...

Paul,
thanks...
lissa
sleeping beauty in a contemporary view (awoken by a kiss)... :)

Richard said...

a kiss as a weapon is a nice juxtaposition; but death is lonelier than dreams. dreams are visitations, death is...

Annamari said...

Richard,

you might be right but this one does not conceptualize.

gautami tripathy said...

Subtly woven emotions in here.

mundane meanderings

Annamari said...

Yes Gautami, emotions...
thanks...

Haiku Tuna said...

ditto gingatao - delicate and strong sums it so well. can't decide which is my favorite stanza, so chose the whole poem!

Annamari said...

Thank you for this comment
…and also for not choosing a favorite.

Anonymous said...

Beautiful. :)


Simona

Annamari said...

thanks. I'm glad you did like it.
(Si multumesc pentru link-ul de pe blog)

Julie said...

So beautiful! I love to stare at my husband's face when he's asleep. I'm sure he'd love to hear that one...ha! But there's something about the quiet "defenselessness" of it that's even more beautiful. Your first stanza brings about all those images. Your second stanza is so true, too. So deep. Wonderful work.

Annamari said...

Julie,

you and your husband are fortunate...
I like to wadch my children when they sleep

Anonymous said...

Such a beautiful poem even the second and third time read. And the comment stream reflects that beauty. Emanations of tenderness.

Annamari said...

thanks, anon

worstpoet said...

You inspire me that I can never be as good a poet as you.

botesteanu said...

read some - finally. liked some - obviously and i thought i might as well ask: care to (re)publish some of the poems on .nu? (i'm low on english posts as it is...)

S.L. Corsua said...

Your point on defenselessness is spot on. Very perceptive of you to show that image, to emphasize that aspect. The part about dreams speaks to me, too, as I have a thing for lucid dreaming. (grin) Cheers. Have a blessed New Year, dear.

Annamari said...

Andrei,

I'd like to (re)publish on .nu?
Could you e-mail me and let me know the ones you liked and how do we continue from here?


S.L.
I realized that not everybody could relate to the feeling of loneliness in dreams and I am glad when somebody understands. However there is beauty in this uniqueness, a cold beauty but…
Happy new year to you!
and should I say?: may we get "visited" more often in our dreams