1.
You are contagious
like a rainy day. Like November
soaks thru my clothes,
my skin. Dip deeper, trickle
in the caverns of my hearth.
2
On the bus
I took the seat behind you.
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I comb your curls around
the curves of your face.
3.
You unfold wonders :
this land of burning sand
and meadowgreen.
an infectious smile
the cinnamon skin.
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16 comments:
There's a beautiful wistful tone in this poem, rain on the window, that feeling of loneliness and longing it bring. Beautiful and evocative, modern and classical.
Beautiful!! I love the idea of a person being "contagious," like November soaking through a coat. This is really wonderful.
Paul and Julie,
Thank you.
November rain has a way of getting under your skin -not necessarily in a good way.
So are sometimes people we let in our minds (and souls) and they become a presence that influences our lives, not in a good way though…
contagious rain and cinnamon skin, lovely combination. I know exactly the kind of rain you mean too,
thank you, Juliet.
though I did not want to imply that the cinnamon skin caused the contagious rain...
Personally, I really liked the ending of this piece
"an infectious smile
the cinnamon skin."
very nice
Beautifully worded.
I understand why this person is contagious. Beautiful write.
The Nobleman
-Nicole
Chris
Thank you for visiting. I have to admit that I am a fool for cinnamon(skin, smell, peeler)
Anthony and Nicole
thank you
this was very sensual, esp. the first stanza, in the best sense of the word. good stuff.
Jason,
thank you. I appreciate. The first is the one I worked on longer ...
I really like "caverns of my hearth" - nice wordplay. Lovely piece, and like the other commenters, I also the image of November soaking through the clothes.
thank you James.
after all this nice comments I'm starting to like the first "crumb" more and more too..:)
I love this kind of "disjoint", ambiguous imagery -- "contagious like a rainy day", "caverns of my hearth", "burning sand and meadowgreen" -- that gets the reader out of the ruts of their expectations so they can see things in a new way. Very nicely done!
A very lovely series, Annamari. The second piece conjures an especially fascinating image of fantasy and desire.
Dave,
thank you for reading so throughly and for your comments.I am always happy when people like my attempts to play with words and images...
Brad,
thank you for noticing the second poem as well. I think each of us sat behind a stranger on the bus and felt attracted and had some fantasies about that person...
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